"Salt" - A New Poem

Saltwater

In the ocean that we went to

Water splashing, swimming

The sun shone on you

As you took my problems away

and we were floating

In the saltwater

I saw saltwater again

and you

In the sea, with the beautiful trees

And the stunning seashells

And the soft sand

In the end, I didn’t want to leave the saltwater

and you, of course

Salty food

Flavor engulfs my mouth

At that fancy restaurant

Devouring things we know we’d regret

the very next day

But the flavor,

It was worth it all.

oh and so were you

Salt in my tears

As they well in my eyes,

About to fall against my will

Two leaky pipes you forgot about

You weren’t here

so they burst.

But the salt was there

To see the tears spill

            you weren’t worth it

The salt gave me the flavor.

            you only added problems

The saltwater let them float away.

            you were never there

And the salt always was.

So now, I go to the ocean

And I go to the restaurant

               not to see the things that could’ve been,

But to take in the salt.

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Yep. I just wrote a whole poem about salt, that's also called "Salt." It's funny, the things you can do with poetry. 

In this poem, I decided to play around with the shape. Most of the poems I've posted are just a basic shape, with a few stanzas stacked on top of each other. With this one, I tinkered with the placing of a few of the lines to sort of symbolize the importance of the subject in each of those lines (I'm not sure how else to explain it 😭). 

In the beginning, the lines that were talking about the other person in the poem were spaced away from the stanza it should've been in; Here, I wanted to convey that the other person was slowly starting to become a less significant person to the narrator  (Since I'm not writing this poem in my point of view, and rather someone else's, I'm going to refer to the person speaking in the poem as the narrator).  In the last stanza, when I wrote "not to see the things that could've been," I spaced it out to display that it's the last thing the narrator thinks of when they go to that ocean or that fancy restaurant. Also, in the second-last stanza, all the lines about the other person are spaced. Here, I want to portray that the "salt" grounds her and makes her feel stable, like the way someone special can do that to you. The other person was supposed to be like the "salt," but they clearly failed. If you want to analyze further, go ahead!

This poem has only a few rhymes, so I brought out the figurative language in it, but I hope to improve this more in my later poems. If you enjoyed reading this poem, check out my other poetry and posts for more content you'll love! What's something/someone in your life that brings you peace, and why that specific thing/person? Leave your answers in the comment down below!

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Poetry (that's not about salt):

https://poetryplusyelena.blogspot.com/2024/08/echoes-of-beach-poetry-acceptance.html

https://poetryplusyelena.blogspot.com/2024/08/a-poem-when-its-early.html
https://poetryplusyelena.blogspot.com/2024/08/10-minutes-on-clock.html

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https://poetryplusyelena.blogspot.com/2024/08/analyzing-songs-perfect-pair-by.html
https://poetryplusyelena.blogspot.com/2024/08/poetic-devices-how-i-use-them.html

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